剑17Test4的线图-开店和关店的数量变化

C17Test 4

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

可以用哪些句式?

试写图中开店的数量,从2011年到2012年,减少。

利用好题干和图形提供的英语表达,number of new shops that opened和number ofshop openings。

1)开店的数量做主语

The number ofshops that opened decreased from 2011 to 2012.

The number ofshop openingsshowed a decrease.

The number ofshop openings more than halved.

2)there be句式

There were fewer and fewershop openings.

3)商店做主语

Fewer and fewer shops opened.

总共8年,16个数据,你觉得难度高吗?

难度高低,其实跟写不写全题目信息有关。

下边将给出难度有差异的3种写法。

降低难度,不写comparisons,失去TA的分数同时失去CC的分。
如果你英语够好,主体段可以写成:
In 2011, the number of shop openings in this country washigh at 8,500,butit more than halved to only 4,000 in 2012, before climbingto just over 6,000 in 2014.Fewer and fewer shops opened in the later four years, with the number reaching 3,000 in 2018 afterlevelling off at 4,000 between 2015 and 2017.
The number of closureswaslowat 6,300 in 2011,anddecreased slightly to 6,000 in the following year. After peaking at 7,100in 2013,Itfelldramatically, to only 600 in 2015, but increased to 5,100 in 2016.Finally, it remained stable until 2018.
显然,上边的主体段没有写交点,段落之间也没有衔接。
把TA和CC的分拿到!
大小关系发生变化的年份(交点)包括2012, 2015, 2016,如图:
剑17Test4的线图-开店和关店的数量变化
2条线有3个交点,写第2条线(closures)的时候加入”超过“:
The number of closureswaslowat 6,300 in 2011,anddecreased slightly to 6,000 in the following year,so it surpassed that of openings. After peaking at 7,100in 2013,Itfelldramatically, to only 600 in 2015,lower than that of openings, but increased to 5,100 in 2016 andexceeded that ofopenings again.Finally, it remained stable until 2018.
两个主体段之间需要衔接,利用它们的相似性:总体上都是下降的。
于是,这一段第一句写成:
1)Similarly, thenumber of closures showed a general fall.或者
2)Similarly, thenumber of closuresfell, but less drastically.
那overall段写什么?
虽然openings在2011年高于closures,但是在2018年低于closures:
Overall, although there were more openings thanclosures in 2011, there were moreclosures in 2018.
完整文章
The line chart illustrates changes inthe numbers of shops that closed and opened in one country from 2011 to 2018.
Overall, although there were more shop openings thanclosures in 2011, there were moreclosures in 2018.
In 2011, the number of openings in this country washigh at 8,500,butit more than halved to only 4,000 in 2012, before climbingto just over 6,000 in 2014.Fewer and fewer shops opened in the later four years, with the number reaching 3,000 in 2018 afterlevelling off at 4,000 between 2015 and 2017.
Similarly, thenumber of closures fell, but less drastically.The number waslowat 6,300 in 2011,anddecreased slightly to 6,000 in the following year,so it surpassed that of openings. After peaking at 7,100in 2013,Itfelldramatically, to only 600 in 2015,lower than that of openings, but increased to 5,100 in 2016 andexceeded that ofopenings again.Finally, it remained stable until 2018.
如果想减少这3个超过,需要换一种思路。

这个题是不常规的线图,其实更像柱状图。
我想把时间分成2段试试。
2014年之前和之后的各4年,把2条线分别分成两半,然后2014年之前和之后各写成一个主体段。
另外,2014年的数量相似,这样就不用写2015年出现的超过了。
剑17Test4的线图-开店和关店的数量变化
这样会要求2个主体段内,写完openings之后要衔接到closures。
2014之前的衔接,closures比openings更稳定
In contrast, the number of closures wasmuch morestablein the four years.
2014之后的衔接,closures(一开始)也是下降的
Similarly, the number of closures felldramatically, ...
2个主体段之间的衔接,2014之后变化比之前更剧烈:
The numbers showedmore drasticchanges in the later four years.
剑17Test4的线图-开店和关店的数量变化
那overall段写什么?
closures总体上小幅下降,openings总体上下降剧烈。
Overall, the number of shop closures decreased slightly through the 8 years,whilethat of openings experienced a drastic fall.
完整文章
黑体标注了衔接词,下划线标注了比较。
The line chart illustrates changes inthe numbers of shops that closed and opened in one country from 2011 to 2018.
Overall, the number of shop closures decreased slightly through the 8 years,whilethat of openings experienced a drastic fall.
In 2011, the number of openings in this country washigh at 8,500,butit more than halved to only 4,000 in 2012, before climbingto just over 6,000 in 2014.In contrast, the number of closures wasmuch morestable in the four years. It waslower thanthat of openings,at 6,300 in 2011,butdecreased only slightly to 6,000 in the following year, so itsurpassedthe number of openings. After peaking at 7,100in 2013,It declined to 6,100in 2014,close tothat of openings.
The numbers showedmore drasticchanges in the later four years.Fewer and fewer shops opened, with the number reaching 3,000 in 2018 afterlevelling off at 4,000 between 2015 and 2017.Similarly, the number of closures felldramatically, to only 600 in 2015. But itincreased to 5,100 in 2016 andexceededthat of openings.Finally, it remained stable until 2018.
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