今天，给大家带来一个IELTS雅思大作文真题（2021.12.18）的原创范文。
题目：
Many people like to eat unhealthy food even though they know it’s bad for them. Why? What are effective ways to improve people's eating habits?
审题：
Type:Report 报告类(Reason and solution 理由&解决方案)
Body 1: Reasons: laziness and convenience
Body 2: Solution: Education and regulation
Key words: why/effective ways to improve
- Model Answer 高分范文-
A greatswatheof the population enjoys eating food that isnon-nutritiousand thathas adeleterious effect ontheir healthdespiteknowingthis is the case.This essay shall explore the reasons behind this phenomenon, along with suggesting methods thatcould help people to eat morehealthily.
One of the major causesbehind this habit ofeating unhealthy foodis thatmany of these foods are convenientto eitherpurchaseorprepare.This is especially true when it comes tothe fast-food industry, whereby instead offinding healthyalternatives,many people will simplyopt forthe easy andtime-saving methodof ordering from McDonald's or KFC,or other suchjunk foodoutlets.Likewise,intoday’s world of disposable goodsandready-to-use products,manyhave become lazy and wouldratherelect foropening a package ofprocessed foodthanto spend the time buying healthy ingredients to cook by themselves.
To counteract this trend ofunhealthy eating,probably the mosteffective methodthatcanbe brought to bear onthis trendis that ofeducation.Just asMcdonald's understands that marketing to children canhelp secure futureconsumers,sosociety should understand that by educating the young about the benefits of eating healthy food,they are more likely toavoidunhealthy foods intheirlater life.Government regulationscan also helpto squelchpeoples’ desire for foods thatin the long-termcanhave a devasting effect onhealth,with suchpoliciesasananti-fat taxor an extra tax on foodsthatcontainadditives proven to be toxic, helping toguidecitizens’dietary habits.
In conclusion,the mainimpetusesfor peopleto acquirean unhealthy dietarytendencyare those of convenience andlaziness,and that botheducation,especiallyof the young,andgovernmental regulatorypolicies, can helpto overcomethisnegative trend within society.
- Essay Analysis 范文解析 -
- (1) Introduction
Paraphrasing from the Statement/Question题目改述:
- Many people =A great swathe of the population
- like to eat =enjoys eating
- unhealthy food =food that is non-nutritious and that has a deleterious effect on their health
- even though =despite knowing
Standard Phrase for the “Report” type essay报告类大作文高分句型：
- This essay shall explore the reasons behind this phenomenon, along with suggesting methods that
Words showing Cohesion (C&C)展示“连贯与衔接”的词汇和短语:
- that
- and that
- , despite
- this is the case
- This
- , along with
Vocabulary高分地道词汇和短语：
a great swathe of 一大批；一大片；很多
non-nutritious 没有营养的
deleterious effect on 对……产生有负面影响；对……有有害的影响
healthily 健康地
- (2) Body 1 -
Aspects that must be referred to 这段需要提到：Why?
Standard IELTS essay phrase雅思高频句型：
- One of the major causes
Vocabulary and Collocations高分地道词汇和短语：
- behind this habit of 在这个习惯背后
- the fast-food industry 快餐产业
- alternatives 备选
- opt for 选择
- time-saving method 省时的方法
- outlets 专营店
- disposable goods 一次性商品
- ready-to-use products 即用产品；现成产品
- elect for 选择
- processed food 加工食品
Words Showing Cohesion [Signposting words, conjunctions, relative pronouns] (C&C)展示“连贯与衔接”的词汇和短语：
- is that
- to either
- This is especially true when it comes to
- , whereby instead of
- , many people will simply
- or other such
- Likewise,
- , many
- rather ____ than
- (3) Body 2 -
Aspects that must be referred to这段需要提到：Effective ways to improve people's eating habits
Standard IELTS essay phrase 雅思高频句型：
- To counteract this trend of 为了抵制/缓和这种趋势
Vocabulary and Collocations高分地道词汇和短语：
- be brought to bear on 应用；调动
- help secure future 保障未来
- to avoid 避免
- later life 以后的生活
- government regulations 政府规章
- to squelch 制止
- in the long-term 从长远来看
- have a devastating effect on 对……有破坏性的影响
- anti-fat tax
- additives proven to be toxic 有害的添加剂
- to guide 引导
- dietary habit 饮食习惯
Words Showing Cohesion [Signposting words, conjunctions, relative pronouns] (C&C)展示“连贯与衔接”的词汇和短语：
- this trend
- , probably the most
- that
- is that of
- Just as….., so
- that by
- , they
- more likely to
- their
- , with such
- as
- , helping to
- (4) Conclusion -
Standard IELTS essay phrase 雅思高频句型：
- In conclusion,
Vocabulary and Collocations高分地道词汇和短语：
- impetus(es) 推动；动力
- to acquire 采取
- tendency 趋势
- laziness 懒惰
- governmental regulatory policies 监管政策
- to overcome 克服
- negative trend 消极趋势
Words Showing Cohesion [Signposting words, conjunctions, relative pronouns] (C&C)展示“连贯与衔接”的词汇和短语：
- , and that
- both
- , especially
- , and
- this
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