在雅思写作中，许多考生面临一个问题——在文章中会写一些“可写可不写”的句子，也就是些哪似乎并不直接推动论点或没有必要的句子。虽然这些句子看似可以存在，但它们往往会影响文章的流畅性和逻辑性。
你需要掌握一个原则：“可写可不写，不写”当你掌握住了这个原则，你的论证逻辑和深度，会有一个很大的提升。因为雅思写作最多只有二三百个单词，不可能让你无限添加不必要的内容，所以每个句子都要“作用最大化【Maximizing effectiveness】”
所以我们应该注重内容的质量，而非字数的数量。如果过多使用“可写可不写”的句子，文章不仅显得冗长，而且缺乏深度
我用写作跑团当中同学的真实作业例子，来给大家展示一下，如果去掉这些 “可写可不写的内容”你的作文会有多“开挂”
1.题目【大学教育的好处】
作业：“University education hepls studnets find decent job. As we know，when studnets graduate from high school，they have to go to university to choose a major as their future directtion.A university degree is often viewed as a basic qualification for many jobs, particularly those in fields like finance, law, and healthcare. Many employers require candidates to have a degree as a minimum criterion for applying.
上述句子中，“As we know，when studnets graduate from high school，they have to go to university to choose a major as their future directtion” 这一部分完全是"事实阐述内容“，并未增加论证的信息。删除这句可以让文章更简洁，丝毫不影响文章的论证。
删除后的例子：
“University education hepls studnets find decent job.A university degree is often viewed as a basic qualification for many jobs, particularly those in fields like finance, law, andhealthcare. Many employers require candidates to have a degree as a minimum criterion for applying.”
删除冗余部分后，论证变得更加直接和精准，避免了不必要的重复。
2. 题目【教育是否是实现成功的唯一因素】
“Some people believe that education is the most important factor in achieving success. They argue that education provides people with the knowledge necessary to build a career and solve problems. In contrast, others believe that talent is the most crucial factor. Talent can help individuals excel in areas like arts or sports.”
这里的第一句和第二句虽然内容相关，但并没有提供更深入的分析或新的信息，反而显得过于重复。多余的句子削弱了文章的连贯性。
删除后的例子：
“Some people believe that education is the most important factor in achieving success, while others argue that talent is crucial for excelling in areas like arts or sports.”
删去重复部分后，句子更加简洁，逻辑关系也变得更加清晰，过渡更加顺畅。
3. 【为什么有的人觉得大学教育很重要】
“There are many reasons why people believe education is important, and these reasons might vary from person to person. One of the most common reasons is that education helps people gain knowledge, which is essential for success.”
第一句虽然似乎提供了背景信息，但“这些理由因人而异”并未对文章的论证提供实质性帮助。
删除后的例子：
“There are many reasons why people believe education is importantOne of the most common reasons is that education helps people gain knowledge, which is essentialfor success.”
删除冗余句子后，句子更加简洁有力，字数和内容更加高效。
所以总结下来，大家在雅思作文里面经常会按照中文的写作思路，加上很多可有可无的句子，基本上围绕子在“阐述过多的背景事实，开头段中简单的无效论证，还有对前一句话的补充”这三种方式是大家作文中最常见的句子逻辑冗杂的表达。
冗余句子不仅会让文章显得冗长、模糊，而且会影响整体的结构和说服力。因此，大家写作时应更加注重句子的简洁性和精准性，确保每个句子都能服务于文章的核心论点，这样写作更加有条理、更具说服力，从而提高写作成绩。
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